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Linger
Oct 6, 2006 6:44:16 GMT -6
Post by soulfir3 on Oct 6, 2006 6:44:16 GMT -6
Her fragrance, danced across the softly woven
skyline, interweaving amongst moon's shadow,
laughing, murmuring,
as stars shone brightly
His eyes, watched as slumber embraced the warm body
curling along side and rested, briefly against flesh
teasing, kissing, an almost invisible touch
Her hand, rose slightly and traced against curve of sin
holding mouth closely too his, mouthing unspoken desire
lower, dancing, feeling pulse and sharp intake of breath
His eyes, fluttered as head tilted backwards
long drawn growls, vibrating against thigh
lips, flesh, aching to speak loudly a name
Her fragrance, swirled in long spirals
drifting over and through senses, tormenting soul
falling against fingers, so he might touch
He fumbles to adjust, heat seers against body
a scent, memory of what was
it dances,
drifts, embraces, lingers
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Linger
Oct 6, 2006 7:30:06 GMT -6
Post by shell on Oct 6, 2006 7:30:06 GMT -6
absolutely gorgeously sensual, Soul! Right that's it ..we need to get air con in this room once and for all!
I love the enigma of this; one is never sure if there is an astral union going on here or if it is more fleshly than that .. or if it is the after-image .. or all of that ... i kind of like the All *grin* ... the format is beautiful, it keeps a misty feel going, abstracts the reader a little so that senses can run free ... awesomely erotic, darling one! xxxx
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Linger
Oct 6, 2006 9:48:30 GMT -6
Post by vixen on Oct 6, 2006 9:48:30 GMT -6
Totally sensational!. Love the flow of this,beautifully penned. Vixne
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Linger
Oct 7, 2006 4:28:13 GMT -6
Post by soulfir3 on Oct 7, 2006 4:28:13 GMT -6
*sighs with relief* , I was a little concerned about this one. Particuarly with the format.
Delighted with your response and appreciation of this piece, Shell *grins*, nice to know I can still make the air con earn it's keep.
Vixen, thank you for the wonderful comments.
x Soul
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Linger
Oct 7, 2006 15:07:49 GMT -6
Post by nimbusGLOW on Oct 7, 2006 15:07:49 GMT -6
'SOUL'-depth...
My friend, that it what this piece has...'SOUL'-depth.
the others said it so much better than I...
and I too love the exploration this poem glides through...
the enigma of the layers between 'question' and 'answer'
and the inter-play of juxta-postisioned 'windows' for the
reader to peer into.
By the way...I find ALL of your work quite idea-evoking...
from your inspiration I've used some parallel thought-tones.
Thank You for that...wonderful gift.
I soooo enjoy the prismatic 'mirrors' of your work, soulfir
'NIM's
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Oct 8, 2006 0:14:18 GMT -6
Post by anirbas on Oct 8, 2006 0:14:18 GMT -6
oxygen...oxygen, please...i'm breathless...and speechless...ooh-la-la...
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Linger
Oct 8, 2006 3:18:12 GMT -6
Post by soulfir3 on Oct 8, 2006 3:18:12 GMT -6
Thrilled and delighted with you reply and thorough enjoyment of this piece, Nim.
If I have helped to inspire any ideas for poetry of your own, then that is even more of an ego boost. Thank you the ever kind words.
xx Soul
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Oct 8, 2006 3:18:47 GMT -6
Post by soulfir3 on Oct 8, 2006 3:18:47 GMT -6
*passes Nir the oxygen mask* .. so pleased you enjoyed this one. x Soul
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Oct 11, 2006 3:10:01 GMT -6
Post by dawness on Oct 11, 2006 3:10:01 GMT -6
where's my oxygen, soul?  breathless!  |
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Oct 13, 2006 2:36:29 GMT -6
Post by soulfir3 on Oct 13, 2006 2:36:29 GMT -6
glad you felt the effects of this piece, dawness *passes mask to dawness*
x Soul
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breathless!
