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Post by DavidMc on Nov 30, 2006 2:16:56 GMT -6
The Spark
The exotic caress of love
Flicks its tongue behind your ear.
It wanders fleetingly
Down the line of your dress,
Shocking you with its tenderness.
You thought that you had forgotten
About love,
A sweet but distant memory.
Maybe you even forgot
That you were a Woman.
Besieged by soaps
And lonely walks around the park.
Yet it only takes a certain smile.
Like a message in a bottle,
Sent first class, to re-ignite the spark.
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Post by brandnewmessiah on Nov 30, 2006 12:19:45 GMT -6
I like this David, it has that element of surprise with the subtleties of passion. ~ BNM
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Post by anirbas on Dec 1, 2006 0:10:51 GMT -6
Bellissimo! It just is...  |
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Post by netfolk on Dec 3, 2006 19:18:32 GMT -6
super job on this one david, I like the way you flick your ideas onto this screen. Much enjoyed and great pen.
peace as always,
Bernie
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Post by dawness on Dec 4, 2006 8:35:54 GMT -6
hmmmmm.... subtly flavored like rich wine!
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Post by DavidMc on Dec 6, 2006 15:00:50 GMT -6
Thanks folks ... this one is a couple of years old, but I thought I would drag it out for an airing!
David
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The Spark
Aug 10, 2024 23:03:03 GMT -6
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Post by anirbas on Aug 10, 2024 23:03:03 GMT -6
Bump.
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Post by artolmaeus on Aug 25, 2024 6:39:41 GMT -6
the man just flows so perfect in verse, it is like a full course meal, all the trimmings, concise and exact, a fine jeweler wordsmith
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Post by anirbas on Sept 3, 2024 16:36:01 GMT -6
I absolutely agree, Jam. Which is why I am always bumping his works back up to the top. I miss him writing, like the old days. But, I guess when you work online all day, the last thing you want to do is stay online and try to form a decent poem. David's works should be read by everyone. If anyone ever told me, "we will publish one of you, but, not both of you" I would choose David's work over mine any day of the week. He is a master wordsmith, a distiller of the written word.
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