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Post by liquidpromise on Sept 24, 2006 16:01:04 GMT -6
No one exactly knows just how much I bleed How much I feel a tyrant crawling on my back Like a monkey I cannot lose The addiction of feeling worthless From years of steady abuse
But then you just happened upon me I thought this was a joke But now you want to stay with me Forever and ever, are you blind? So honored, of your love, I will not let go
I will bleed eternally If ever something happened to you My world will be heavy wadding in the moor Of sorrow, immense degradation Out like a flood, will my heart pour
I don’t believe I ever took the time To tell you just how grateful I feel Tears streaming down my face Expecting the worse to come This agony of past let downs are for me, too real
But you have giving me, us, a chance Trapped on the throws of agonizing sorrow I suppose I should learn to do the same There is a deep love for you I thought I could never feel As you wipe away these tears from my face
I look up into your eyes They are the windows to the soul, showing the truth That you do love me, and desperately you want us to grow Not understanding my shame, you ease into comforting me You ease me in learning how to love me too
That shock of faith, your courage shining through Begging me the chance should I choose to step through Leading me to love, wide open, stands this door Where heart’s matter, I now know I do too You have taught me well, merely, by walking in my shoes
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Post by anirbas on Sept 24, 2006 21:58:53 GMT -6
Stunning, nirmute inspiring work, Lauren. Got more? Sabrina
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Post by DavidMc on Sept 25, 2006 5:52:01 GMT -6
This is one of your lighter pieces Lauren, I feel. What went wrong ;D
I particularly like this verse. It holds resonance.
David
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Post by liquidpromise on Sept 25, 2006 15:40:44 GMT -6
LOL ...
Well, I figure people were getting tired of my sad and lonely epitaths, so I figured I would oblige them with something corny about love, leaving them with my usual ending, of course, paraphrasing the God awful truth laced in reality, lol. So do you think it worked?, do you feel apeased? ... Just joking ...
But I did want to give people another side of me, that rarely shows itself even to me, lol.
Thank you Nir and David.
Yeah, what did go wrong?, cuz somewhere I must have blinked and missed that bleeding road, all together, *Smiles~
Thanks guys, truly, Lauren
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Post by nimbusGLOW on Sept 25, 2006 16:44:46 GMT -6
Lauren...
I agree with the others... filled with (as part of your poem-name implies) Promise.
Looks like You, the Dark, the Light, and Spirit are coming to a mutual understanding.
David and I share the same favorite verse...my 'fav' line is 'you ease me into learning how to love me too'
Truthfully...the whole piece is a 'fav' of mine...very pure, dear one.
'NIM' moved-in-my-soul
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Post by anirbas on Sept 26, 2006 8:06:25 GMT -6
You're in good company, for what it's worth, Lauren...Somewhere I blinked and missed the bloody road, too...LOL...I don't care if you write dark or light, or somewhere in between; just write, dear lady, just write. Sabrina
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Post by liquidpromise on Sept 28, 2006 5:56:32 GMT -6
And let the emotions be seen...
Thank you Nir and nimbus, actually ... THANK YOU everyone for always treating me well.
Sincerely, Lauren
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Post by anirbas on Sept 28, 2006 13:02:51 GMT -6
You're so very welcome, sweets...And yes, let the emotions be seen...When I try to block my emotions, it effects everything else about me...Gives me intellectual constipation for one, aka writer's block, for one thing...ggglgggl...but, it does...And why wouldn't we treat you well? Far as I can see you're swell...Except for the tick in your right cheek...And the odd way your left eye looks the other direction...And the way the right one, keeps staring right at me...Not... It just sounded funny to type it, cause I was thinking it, and so I did...Angling to make you laugh again...In short, poeming or commenting, you crack me up, lady! Sabrina
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Post by liquidpromise on Sept 28, 2006 20:22:51 GMT -6
A spontaneous poet, that's exactly what every site needs, lol Thanks a mil hon
Lauren
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Post by anirbas on Sept 29, 2006 13:26:34 GMT -6
(((((((((Lauren)))))))))
and btw...
TAG! YOU'RE IT!
...and you can't tag me back, cause i'm already gone...but, you can, pass it on...
Nir.
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Post by kathylynn on Oct 1, 2006 9:30:22 GMT -6
well written poem. I enjoyed reading it very much.
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Post by liquidpromise on Oct 6, 2006 21:59:30 GMT -6
Thank you, h on.
*Smiles~
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Post by dawness on Oct 7, 2006 18:37:47 GMT -6
the power of empathy, of entering into the world of another... this is compassion. wonderful, laurs. thank you.
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Post by liquidpromise on Oct 21, 2006 7:16:53 GMT -6
Thank you, hon ...
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Post by anirbas on Oct 21, 2006 23:00:19 GMT -6
*LAUREN!*
psst...guess what?
TAG! YOU'RE IT!
and you can't catch me... cause i'm already... phht...pop... nirgone... *in more ways than one* but, you can, pass it on...
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