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Post by glenn on Oct 14, 2006 11:25:11 GMT -6
near a shelf on a wall of a room that is looming the apothecary tends to a potion black and fuming and he sees as he eases the pain with some more his face in a mirror that hangs on the door
that falls to the floor and breaks with the shock but the image laying scattered continues to mock and he covers his eyes and his ears and he's screaming like a child who's been crying like life has no meaning
like the rhyme of a song on a radio blaring like the horn of a car of a man who is staring at his face in the mirror, all cracked and distorted, and he's hollow and wretched and old and contorted
but it all buckles in and the world is like sleeping as he fingers the gun whose dark bullet is creeping through the blood and th pain, like the wine and the tatters, till his mind is a mirror and like pieces it shatters
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Post by anirbas on Oct 17, 2006 5:34:40 GMT -6
WOW! I didn't know you could write dark stuff, Glenn. This is wonderful. Got more? Nir
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Post by liquidpromise on Oct 22, 2006 7:20:29 GMT -6
Da*n it, boy!
I am stunned by the eloquence of this piece, worthy of the likes as Alister Crowley and Edgar Allen Poe, just to name a few who helped to bend poetry to what it is today ...
Excellent writing, my writes pale in comparison. I wish I were smart enough to grasp the stylings of your piece, learning impaired, and make mine just as incredible as what I have read here, so far.
Congrats on your superiority, *smiles~, no but seriously, I love this write very much.
Safe Journey! Lauren
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Post by dawness on Oct 23, 2006 1:19:54 GMT -6
the limited points of human reversals! this needs a follow up, glen. shimmering in the dark..
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