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Post by anirbas on May 27, 2013 17:09:55 GMT -6
She stood over him in the night while he slept, unperturbed. A lone figure keeping vigil, a shade darker than the shadows dancing on the walls about her thrown in relief against the bedroom wall from the trees outside whipping about to the summer whine of a hot Texas wind
Three times she stood, thusly in the span of two weeks. She might have been a nurse, keeping watch over a sickly patient, save for the butcher knife she held in her hand as she comtemplated his demise at her weary, battle scarred hands...
While the meanest man that ever lived blindly snored and pharted never knowing how close he came to the execution of all his bodily functions with one upthrust through his ribs from a sword wielded by a woman he thought he'd beaten into utter submission...
Instead...
Well, isn't it obvious? He still draws breath and she's still ever free. As she made the choice and left in the middle of the night while the meanest man that ever lived slept, snored and pharted in a bed burned long ago by the choices he made with his feet and his fists
She stood over him in the night while he slept, unperturbed. A lone figure keeping vigil, a shade darker than the shadows dancing on the walls about her thrown in relief against the bedroom wall from the trees outside whipping about to the summer whine of a hot Texas wind
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Post by anirbas on May 31, 2013 19:32:26 GMT -6
Did this one scare y'all? Aw, come on. It's just a little story poem...
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Post by heartfelt7 on Jun 2, 2013 10:21:05 GMT -6
Heck yeah this one scared me (ha). Too many women face this kind of decision in the mind. It made me think too much. Your poems tend to do that. And question! Is life fair? Is fair right? Wars are fought over these kinds of questions. The same kind of war going on in the above poem. It seems to me - The knife was fair, but leaving was right.
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Post by anirbas on Jun 2, 2013 23:26:03 GMT -6
Haha, sorry I scared you, darlin'. Good to know I can still write a piece here and there that can make folks sit up and think. lol And you encapsulated the underlying concept of the piece. The knife was fair, nay, justified, but leaving was right. I should know...As Stephen King says, "Write what you know..." Whahahahahahaha.
Thank you for your read and comments. In coming back to respond I realized, I kind of flubbed the first and last stanza...Walls appears twice in both stanzas...And I do not like to repeat words that are not connective words. My lil' affectation...lol...
Anyway, not in the mood to tweak it now...I'm a bit excited, yes, I am...Heading over to Zip, to recount my moment as Sheroe of the Moment!!!!!! hehe
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Post by DavidMc on Jun 9, 2013 11:36:04 GMT -6
Scared!! Heck I sleep in the same bed as this maniac.. ;D
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Post by anirbas on Jun 9, 2013 20:46:32 GMT -6
Gigglegiggle...It is, what it is...
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