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Post by heartfelt7 on Jul 28, 2013 8:59:49 GMT -6
Dancing in the Light
I imagine the Heart as an ocean of Love
meant to fill a vast and empty mind,
an inland sea is this mind of ME
bound within this small Material Entity.
I imagine this sea as a mind divided,
one part filled, one not yet filled,
one part joyful consciousness dancing in the Light
and one unconscious shadow crying in the night.
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Post by moseley on Aug 12, 2013 21:55:29 GMT -6
for some reason, I am hungry for this poem..in what it is lacking, as I read it, I just feel like you stopped short, you could have filled a volume up with this and you did a very short version, which is also a great tease because I have written in the voids of my own experience with this. However, I want to read more that I did not imagine between and in and around because this is poking at an origin of consciousness, a source and it teases me to think you wanted to sprout thoughts from a seed...you did, in that, and I do agree, is what a good poem is, it is never what the reader interprets from any poem that means anything it is the poem that is born from the poem that is now a personal quest to think that makes a poem worthwhile in my opinion, this one does that, but I want something more of this one.
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Post by heartfelt7 on Aug 13, 2013 16:29:42 GMT -6
Sorry, Moseley. Most of my poems do seem to stop short. My mind tries to express in words what my Heart tries to express in feelings. I am a slow student. I think it's supposed to be that way. Who could ever know?
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Post by moseley on Aug 13, 2013 20:15:07 GMT -6
this is your flow my dear, it is your pulse on your neck, if I can but press softly and feel it, however long or short, is quite better than not at all eh?
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Post by anirbas on Aug 13, 2013 20:48:55 GMT -6
(soft smile) simple, direct...heartfelt...thought flow...
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