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Post by DavidMc on Nov 4, 2006 9:47:57 GMT -6
Driftwood.
He thinks a lot about the sea
And the changing of the tides
Turbulent salty metaphors
Fermenting his sickly insides
He spy’s mermaids far out
On the scratched horizon
Hears dolphins crying in the deep
Mad phases in the lunar cycle
Drag him under in his sleep
He thinks a lot about the sea
Of Neptunian lovers seeking land
Sailing in arcs around the tropics
Driftwood washed up on the sand
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Post by rrw on Nov 4, 2006 10:33:46 GMT -6
David, this is exquisite! This sets a haunting mood... the thing I really like about it is that it's extremely moving and yet I don't, as a reader, understand the context. This I think adds a since of mystery to the piece. It's like walking do the street and seeing someone who is deeply sad but you don't know why. Congratulations on this well crafted and deep poem. I'll be thinking about it all day.
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Post by anirbas on Nov 4, 2006 21:57:22 GMT -6
*CLAP! CLAP! CLAP! CLAP! CLAP!*
Got more?
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Post by vixen on Nov 5, 2006 13:09:33 GMT -6
David, beautiful. It makes me feel meloncholy and serene at the same time. Great piece. Vixen
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Post by amycando on Nov 5, 2006 18:54:57 GMT -6
David,
I loved this piece and the tone of it seemed in harmony with my soul!
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Post by dawness on Nov 6, 2006 1:15:22 GMT -6
deep reflection with subtle pinings... mesmerized!
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Post by DavidMc on Nov 6, 2006 1:47:11 GMT -6
Thank you all most kindly  David |
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Post by pegesus on Nov 7, 2006 17:07:05 GMT -6
david, this was an exceptional peice, i throughly enjoyed reading it
peg
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Post by DavidMc on Nov 8, 2006 5:10:20 GMT -6
Glad you enjoyed it peg The poem is about a feeling I tried to put into words. I know we all have 'those feelings' we try to articulate and sometimes we can only connect through images. Clearly it worked for many here for which I am truly grateful. David |
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Post by anirbas on Nov 8, 2006 12:45:27 GMT -6
You're very welcome, Chief...It's just an excellent piece, period...So, got more? Sabrina
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Post by DavidMc on Nov 16, 2006 16:55:07 GMT -6
Thank you all ... it's the best thing I've written for a while.
David
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Post by magpie on Dec 8, 2006 20:18:32 GMT -6
Yes, this one's a great write, David. Love the last two lines of the first verse...
Thought i'd throw in one i wrote a while ago that seems to fit this theme a little....
An Island
An island am I in the sea of life
Changing with every tide
My borders daily different
The waters as they ride
Away with what was part of me
Bring back a gift as well
Exchanging branch for driftwood
Or sand for pearly shell
Though what was me drifts away
New parts of me abide
And I am daily different…
Ebbs and flows the tide.
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Post by DavidMc on Dec 9, 2006 3:27:54 GMT -6
Thanks for the egg you laid in my nest Mags A very enjoyable read it was! David |
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Post by amycando on Dec 9, 2006 7:15:24 GMT -6
Marianne, that was a lovely piece just perfect to keep company with David's piece! Both exquisite!  |
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Post by anirbas on Dec 9, 2006 11:21:38 GMT -6
Beautiful piece, Mags! Got more? Nir.  |
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Post by magpie on Dec 10, 2006 17:19:17 GMT -6
thanks guys! maybe this one? (also an oldie)
Some odd years I have known:
Like bottles broken by a reckless sailor
And jettisoned, were some of those draughts drunk…
Those blends of finite input, some rough and unfinished and
Reeking of pine boxes
Not mellowed oaks…
Older now I walk the beaches of Memory
Gleaning the waterworked and sandworn shards
Made opaque and interesting
By time and movement away from the
Place of brokenness and origin.
Running with the tides
Comes the evidence of shattered memories…
Pray they be
Smoothed by the passages of time…
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Post by bichsa on Jan 25, 2007 7:02:58 GMT -6
I am glad your bringing the poems back for I missed this Gem ,well done Bravo! peace ,cheryl
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Post by DavidMc on Jan 25, 2007 12:56:06 GMT -6
Thank you Cheryl, and I was delighted that Mags added her own work.
David
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Post by bichsa on Jan 25, 2007 14:34:24 GMT -6
thanks for pointing out sweet Mags add on it was worth the read sometimes I only read the poem at hand and never check if others have added on ,i need to keep better eye great job Miss magpie!peace c
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Post by glenn on Jan 26, 2007 17:03:28 GMT -6
Very nice! David and Magpie.
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